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Exodus



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PostPosted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 7:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I stared down at the river, wishing myself a boat, but none appeared, and the settling night chill discouraged me from setting hoof in the river’s muddy water. --> a hoof


I believe that this sentance is correct. You just have to take out the hoof and add in foot and it sounds a bit more... 'normal'. As in like, "I've never set foot in their house before!" or, "the minute you set foot in there, you're as good as dead."
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:10 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Exodus wrote:
I believe that this sentance is correct.


Incorrect. You spelled sentence wrong. Wink
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 9:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I have my own world of spelling, where opinion has 2 Ps and morph comes with an E on the end of it.
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 11:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Laughing amaunator usually you tear my grammar apart, but you're one for four today! Ex is spot-on with my intentions re: "hoof" vs. "foot"; the "bore it testament" is a construct I read somewhere reputable and really liked, so it stays; as for whomever... that's a real easy stylistic choice to make in the 21st century. Wink

"pain" and "as" were spot on though. thanks... Embarassed
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 13, 2007 12:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

in the most recent update there is a section where the tex

t looks like this.

i believe the error was made on the word guard, i think if you just search the post for "guar" you should find it.
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 13, 2007 1:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Exodus wrote:
Quote:
I stared down at the river, wishing myself a boat, but none appeared, and the settling night chill discouraged me from setting hoof in the river’s muddy water. --> a hoof


I believe that this sentance is correct. You just have to take out the hoof and add in foot and it sounds a bit more... 'normal'. As in like, "I've never set foot in their house before!" or, "the minute you set foot in there, you're as good as dead."


Ah yes, didn't notice that it was meant as a figure ^^.

Alb... I have my good days Very Happy. I think I'm going to lay low for a week Very Happy. Been writing too much French lately, screws with my English Very Happy.
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 13, 2007 8:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Am... Wrong post Razz.
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PostPosted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 10:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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At leas this time I wouldn’t be completely alone.
Least

Quote:
I hadn’t seen this dully view, this land, in years
Not so sure about this one, but dull view, rather than dully?
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 5:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

"a split second before it impacted, a saw a pair of eyes " Just a little typo.
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 11:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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It was night, and the moon shown down from its apex. I looked down, and regretted it immediately: we were high up on a cliff.


in chapter VII, about halfway down

[[got it, thanks - A]]
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 6:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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“They better not come for you here,” said Rhy, grinning wickedly, and for a brief instant a tiny flamed danced on the tip of her finger.


Flamed to flame. Chapter two, after Horse cooks the meal for them.

Quote:
She smiled underneath her brown hood and shook her head. “It’s not really, is it,” she said.

, should be ? Chapter 2 shortly there after.

Quote:
“No change,” said Widget. “The big bull in the corner is buying all your drinks tonight.” He jumped a bit and pointed to the tauren in the nook next to mine. “Means more rent!” The gnome pulled the coins toward him and pocked them. “Who’s your friend?” he asked.


Pocked should be pocketed. Chapter 2 in the bar scene.

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I’d walk downstairs, have a blood sausage at Widget’s bar, check my mailbox, and, after hour or so spent “meditating” at the Scarlet Cathedral, I’d get to work on whatever quests the day had brought me.


hour should have an an before it. chapter two, the next morning.

Quote:
I finished, and went outside.


Was this just for effect? Usually that wouldn't have a comma after it, but if you meant there to be a slight pause in the narroration (to presumably put more emphasis on the first clause) there it's perfectly justified. I just thought I'd bring it to your attention in case it wasn't.

Okay, that's it for chapter 2 from what I could find. I just thought I'd help with sme more of the brass tacks since I was reading through the Murloc again anyway. (Now that I finally have some time. My basement almost flooded and I had to take the water out in buckets from where the sub pump usually does. It overheated from the huge flood we got here in New York.)
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 8:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Chapter 6

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“You’d better,” said one of the orcs, but man in black bowed his head to Fang and said,


put a the between man and but.

Quote:
and don’t shout about things which are secret. That, as a generally good idea.”


Remove the comma and change to is, I believe.

Quote:
“Since then,” he said, “the Dawn has been fighting a different kind of war, a shadow war, against an enemy with no leadership or purpose.


he should be she.
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 9:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

awesome sabes, good eye.
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 9:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks, Alb. Just doing my job.

It's really funny actually. I'm pretty incapable when it comes to checking my own grammar and spelling but awesome at it when I'm reading through others' stuff.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 5:31 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Maybe it's because you know what's happening next in your story and you don't in others, so you actually fully read the whole thing when reading other's? Meh, probably not, I'll go over there now. *Walks over there*
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