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Ulkarr



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PostPosted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 2:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I motion a petition for keeping the attack gnome in the story. Not that I think Alb will take it out, more just for good measure. All welcome to sign. Very Happy


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PostPosted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 9:34 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I motion for the correction of 'Tolkein' on the frontpage ^^.
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 9:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I motion for the correction of Ulkkar's post, because I don't think a "potition" would be very affective. A petition might help though!
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 11:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Exodus wrote:
I motion for the correction of Ulkkar's post, because I don't think a "potition" would be very affective. A petition might help though!


I wasn't going to bring it that far... Very Happy
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Rolling Eyes all petitions granted.
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Saranus



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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 2:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Since when does fang have a pet snake? I never noticed it before, but it's talked about as if it's already been mentioned.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 12:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Have a quick re-read of the rewrite chapter one, it's in there. Also in "The Mansion" when he's writing letters. I think I might've added it during the re-rewrite when everyone was like "keep it a mystery what kind of being Horse is!".[/quote]
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Exodus



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PostPosted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 12:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Alright, about the old ending to this most recent update, wtf was with the assassin there? I mean, he attacked horse and what not, got faught off by some mysterious people and then never, ever reappeared in the story?
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 7:57 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

When I first put him in, he was going to figure prominently as the main bad guy for the rest of the Part. It didn't work, obviously, but he does show up again - in the shadows outside Horse's window in Crossroads. He serves a larger point in the story - showing how far the Scarlets' reach has become ("The Scarlet Reach" was an alternative title I considered for this chapter), and raising the mystery of why they would go so far out of their way to try to kill him. I'd planned to bring him back eventually.

Penelope now serves the same purpose, but she gets to do other stuff as well, making the assassin scene seem less pointless for the moment. Stuff like this is why I have a rewrite.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 7:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

And here was I thinking that it only served the purpose to reveal that the law was following Horse and giving him food... It's definately better now though Very Happy (that's not so say I didn't love it the first time, because then I'd be lieing.)
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 12:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Quote:
I hadnít seen this dully view, this land, in years


I believe you wanted a dull view. Also, you use dull in the paragraph just before that one as well, which is a touch repetitive. Only a little bit though. Other than that, good section; I like it.
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Sten



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PostPosted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 10:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

is it my imagination or the attack gnome and the part with eyonix and matt the gnome disappeared?
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 3:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sten wrote:
is it my imagination or the attack gnome and the part with eyonix and matt the gnome disappeared?


The attack gnome became an attack human and the part with Eyeonix and Matt the Gnome was in one of the Orcmar Shorts Smile.


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PostPosted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 8:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Amaunator wrote:
Sten wrote:
is it my imagination or the attack gnome and the part with eyonix and matt the gnome disappeared?


The attack gnome became an attack human and the part with Eyeonic and Matt the Gnome was in one of the Orcmar Shorts Smile.


'tis not the truth. The attack gnome and Matt the Gnome are to appear at the inn in XR, where horse is about to enter. Unless that's all being revised...
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 21, 2007 7:45 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Exodus wrote:
Amaunator wrote:
Sten wrote:
is it my imagination or the attack gnome and the part with eyonix and matt the gnome disappeared?


The attack gnome became an attack human and the part with Eyeonic and Matt the Gnome was in one of the Orcmar Shorts Smile.


'tis not the truth. The attack gnome and Matt the Gnome are to appear at the inn in XR, where horse is about to enter. Unless that's all being revised...


that's the thing, it looks like horse is going to Mulgore instead of XR, or maybe it's me.
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