The Rewrite

Ulkarr · Joined: 23 Jul 2005 Posts: 598 Location: Brisbane

I motion a petition for keeping the attack gnome in the story. Not that I think Alb will take it out, more just for good measure. All welcome to sign. Very Happy

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Amaunator · Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 9:34 am Post subject:

I motion for the correction of 'Tolkein' on the frontpage ^^.

Exodus · Joined: 26 Feb 2006 Posts: 2262 Location: P-Town represent!

I motion for the correction of Ulkkar's post, because I don't think a "potition" would be very affective. A petition might help though!
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Amaunator · Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 11:39 am Post subject:

Albatros · Site Admin Joined: 15 Jul 2005 Posts: 2111

all petitions granted.

Saranus · Joined: 06 Sep 2005 Posts: 836

Since when does fang have a pet snake? I never noticed it before, but it's talked about as if it's already been mentioned.

Albatros · Site Admin Joined: 15 Jul 2005 Posts: 2111

Have a quick re-read of the rewrite chapter one, it's in there. Also in "The Mansion" when he's writing letters. I think I might've added it during the re-rewrite when everyone was like "keep it a mystery what kind of being Horse is!".[/quote]

Exodus · Joined: 26 Feb 2006 Posts: 2262 Location: P-Town represent!

Alright, about the old ending to this most recent update, wtf was with the assassin there? I mean, he attacked horse and what not, got faught off by some mysterious people and then never, ever reappeared in the story?
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Albatros · Site Admin Joined: 15 Jul 2005 Posts: 2111

When I first put him in, he was going to figure prominently as the main bad guy for the rest of the Part. It didn't work, obviously, but he does show up again - in the shadows outside Horse's window in Crossroads. He serves a larger point in the story - showing how far the Scarlets' reach has become ("The Scarlet Reach" was an alternative title I considered for this chapter), and raising the mystery of why they would go so far out of their way to try to kill him. I'd planned to bring him back eventually.

Penelope now serves the same purpose, but she gets to do other stuff as well, making the assassin scene seem less pointless for the moment. Stuff like this is why I have a rewrite.

Exodus · Joined: 26 Feb 2006 Posts: 2262 Location: P-Town represent!

And here was I thinking that it only served the purpose to reveal that the law was following Horse and giving him food... It's definately better now though Very Happy

(that's not so say I didn't love it the first time, because then I'd be lieing.)
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Erikc · Joined: 30 Aug 2005 Posts: 363 Location: The Great Northwet

Sten · Joined: 10 Mar 2006 Posts: 272

is it my imagination or the attack gnome and the part with eyonix and matt the gnome disappeared?
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Amaunator · Posted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 3:42 pm Post subject:

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