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PostPosted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 11:57 pm    Post subject: Word choice Reply with quote

"His look of disease had grown...." Some parts might be clearer, or less stumbled-over, if you used "dis-ease" or "unease". This is especially important around the Forsaken, who are literally diseased. BTW, I'm enjoying the story very much!

Edit: Sorry, I should have posted this as a reply in the thread for The Darkened Tree, chapter XIII. That's where the relevant quote is from.
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 9:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Extra threads about random stuff are fine. I noticed my poor word choice there earlier, but I haven't gotten around to fixing it yet. actually - thanks for getting it back on my radar =)
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